J. Haux

*cough* ...proofread, please. There are several grammatical errors. The most prominent among them: dialogue punctuation. I think it's just because you aren't aware of it... Unless it's a proper noun, ...

Dun dun dun!!! :wink:

Hi Sophia! I'm Jacquie, and welcome to YWS. I'm a fairly new member, but I'm enjoying it--hope you do too!

I do enjoy it, very much. Did I play correctly?

snuck

P.S. It's okay that you didn't proofread, but you could at least have run spellcheck to catch those words that were almost unrecognizable.

Jenna, this is exciting and original. I like the way it's developing. :D But...ouch! Spelling! It's not my strongpoint either, but if you ran spellcheck it would catch most of ...

better

Yeah. I know.

They're very good. I think you could make more contrast of lights and darks. Also, the only reason the dog looks disproportionate is the one eye. but other than that, ...

7/10 I've read the Wind on Fire Trilogy. :D

9/10 Custom-made! :D Bobo drew it!

starvation

shiver

free/caged